You have just returned home from a holiday and have received photographs from a friend who was on holiday with you. Write to your frind thanking them for the photographs. You should include: -a description of the photos -the most memorable thing about the holiday -invite them to come and stay with you

#home #holiday #photographs #friend #frind #-a #description #photos #-the #-invite

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Dear Sushant, I hope you reached home safely. Thank you so much for sending over the fabulous pictures

especially

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the one which we took

near

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near-dead

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dead

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the dead

a dead

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valley. The sightseeing was breathtaking and

photos

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the photos

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came out fabulous. One of the

unforgetable

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unforgettable

thing

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things

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about the vacation is the camping trip we did near

Yosemitepark

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Yosemite park

. That night we had a lot of fun and enjoyment.

Linking Words

Additionally

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the barbeque party was

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

67 words

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Some people believe that all children should learn second language from the time they start school, while others believe that it is better to wait until a child is at secondary school. Discuss both views and give Your opinion.

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Many governments think that economic progress is the most important goal.some people however think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

spending money on the conservation of wildlife animals is a waste of resources. This money would be better spent on other more important things. Do you agree?