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Write about the following topic. There are many people who go to live in different countries. To what extent should people be allowed to move freely between countries and live where they choose? What are the benefits and drawbacks of this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

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Nowadays,
people
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 are crazy about moving into foreign
countries
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. In my opinion, there should be some
restrictions
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 same as currently for moving and living into the abroad. Here, we are going to discuss why some regulations are mandatory and what are some of their benefits and disadvantages of them.
Firstly
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, If there are no rules and
restrictions
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 available for settlement of the human being in foreign
countries
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; residents of that
country
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 may live in fear that foreigners may take control of their
country
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 at any time. They can't live peacefully within their own region. Outsiders may become intruders and it will create conflict maybe sooner or later.
For example
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, in
Afghanistan
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,Afghanistan
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 there were no
restrictions
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 for Taiwanese
people
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.
Thus
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,
as a
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result
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,result
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 recently Taiwan
people
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 have taken control over Afghanistan and
people
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 of
this
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country
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 are forced to leave their own places.
Nevertheless
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, each and every
country
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 should have its laws and
restrictions
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 imposed on foreigners. No
people
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 should allow to move and live abroad freely without going through that
country
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's process.
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, there should be strict laws for crossing the borders of the
countries
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.
For example
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, the Indian government recently proposed Citizenship Amendment Act (CAA) to stop intruders from other
countries
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 to enter and living in India without valid citizenship. The reason behind considering
this
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 law was that the
people
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 from Bangladesh used to come to India and they have started living here forever. To conclude, for the safe and peaceful living of individuals of one
country
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; the government of that locality should think about imposing strict laws and regulations for outsiders. Each and every person from outside of the
country
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 should undergo the proper process.
Hence
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, no foreigners can come freely anytime and take control of that
country
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.
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