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Nowadays, young people communicate with friends and family mostly through social networking sites, rather than other ways of communication like talking on the phone or face to face. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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It is apparent that the communication between teenagers and their
friends
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 and family members by using social network
such
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 as Facebook, Instagram and Twitter
instead
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 of interaction in person have increased these days. In my opinion,
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 social
media
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 connects
teens
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 to
friends
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 and family in positive ways, there is a number of negative effects of social
media
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 on communication. On the one hand, social
media
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 plays an important role in the establishment of
teens
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' friendships and family
relationships
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.
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, it is a critical platform for making and staying in touch with
friends
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 and family. In
this
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 way, young
people
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 can keep a close relationship with family and
friends
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.
Moreover
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, social
media
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 not only connects
teens
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 to information, family and
friends
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 but
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 connects them to opportunities for social support from their
friends
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, family and broader social networks.
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, a recent study shows that 68% of
teens
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 have received support on social
media
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 during challenges or tough times.
As a result
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, young
people
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 enjoy the way social
media
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 better connects them to more
people
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.
On the other hand
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, it is undeniable that these technologies can
also
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 cause negative influences
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 as isolating
people
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 and discouraging real interaction between
people
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.
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, excessive use of the internet and social networking sites may limit proper interpersonal skill development. They affect users’ interpersonal communication skills and
relationships
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.
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, a study found that the internet contributed to social alienation. Regular Internet users attended fewer social events and spent less
time
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 with
friends
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 and family.The more
time
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 user spent online, the less
time
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 user spent with authentic
relationships
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.
This
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 can cause a problem in their
relationships
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. In conclusion, with many benefits of social networking sites present, there is a number of negative impacts as well. Virtual interactions can be very beneficial for users to connect with each other and they can help maintain their
relationships
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. While social networking sites can be used depending on the
time
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 and place.
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