Government should spend more money on medical research and less on researching the environment . What extent do you agree or disagree ?

Every country has their own substantial budget both for medical
research
and
environment
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research
. The implications of both
research
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can affect our
life
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lives
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in general. In my opinion, exploration
towards
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of
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the
environment
could be beneficial for us and can help the generation to live better in the future.
First
, our activities have been affecting our
environment
in which arising natural calamities,
such
as bushfire, landslide, and flood.
Recent
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times, we have been watching the news regarding
this
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the
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bad effects of
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the environment
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environment
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environmental
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crisis.
For example
, a few months ago, there was
flood
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a flood
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in Indonesia
then
followed by
cyclone
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a cyclone
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that affect
thousand
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thousands
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of people to be
resecued
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rescued
recycled
.
Therefore
, we need an improvement in our analysis in relation to
environment
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the environment
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and find solutions to prevent
more
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apply
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worse effects.
Second
, if we still did not carry our
research
through
surroundings
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our surroundings
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, we will fail to discover new things that embodied our habitat. New medical findings can be invented based on
this
research
as well.
For instance
, we can cure more plant diseases and animals as well.
Thus
, it is
also
necessary to have depth analysis in terms of our
environment
. In conclusion, both
research
activities are important but we should not forget our
environment
as in times of our new discoveries of viruses, there is no doubt many things we need to explore and yet to be discovered.
Consequently
, environmental
research
should be prioritized more as
this
also
can help medical activities.

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