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According to those in the travel business, the nature of the average “holiday” is changing. Rather than seeking a relaxing break in a far-away place, people now want excitement on their holidays and keen to participate in unusual and challenging activities. Do you agree or disagree

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Holiday plays an integral part in our lives for those who are under the pressure of demanding jobs. Nowadays, a growing number of
people
 who work in travel agencies indicate that
instead
 of visiting far-flung tourist attractions, young adults tend to take part in plenty of novel
activities
 in the vicinity. From my point of view, I strongly agree with
this
 view as these
activities
 could provide better experiences. On the one hand, in the modern era, the concept of travelling has already changed. Particularly more and more young adults are occupied by many factors from society,
such
 as social status, careers, family responsibilities and so on. As a consequence, spending time
on
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 recreational places or leisure centres helps them refresh their minds to mitigate all concerns about money.
Moreover
, extreme
activities
 improve their positive mental and physical health, and it
also
 encourages plenty of soft skills and knowledge.
For example
, many
people
 get involved in extreme sports
such
 as hiking or scuba diving that makes them feels adventurous – the feelings that tranquil places could not apply.
On the other hand
,
people
 tend to visit a place of refreshment with their friends or a family that encourages close-knit family ties or a good relationship with friends.
In addition
, locations to have fun are not too hard to get in and it is
also
 budget-friendly costs to appropriate to all ages. To conclude, as far as I am concerned, forms of challenging
activities
 are more attractive to young
people
.
Nevertheless
, it doesn’t mean visiting a place
that is
 peaceful and tranquil could be ignored. We should respect and preserve all the breathtaking views from our countries as a beautiful feature.
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