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Populations in developing nations are rapidly growing, people now believe that we should turn to GM crops to increase the production of food grains. Discuss the Advantages and Disadvantages of this approach.

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developing countries are exponentially increasing, citizens think that we need to start using
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Genetically modified staples to improve the growth of
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cereals. Let’s discuss the advantages and disadvantages of
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 with, the human population is increasing, and it is doing so at a quicker rate than expected. More and more nutritious food is required to feed the entire community and prevent starvation, upheaval, or civil conflict. By enhancing local food production in third- and first-world countries,
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 claim and assure that nutrients are available to everyone.
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, genetically modified
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 by reducing their reliance on the industrial world.
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 foods, on the other side, have been linked to the development of diseases, like cancer by some research groups. They argue that because the disease is caused by DNA mutations, introducing new genes into the human body is risky.
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, some foods include allergens, which have a higher risk of causing allergic reactions following intake.
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, it's widely assumed that
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 put human health and the environment on the back burner in the name of profits and corporate wealth. In a nutshell, people who truly believe that
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harm to human health and biodiversity are on one side of the heated debate.
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, experts are confident that plant genetic engineering is a technique with huge potential for improving food yield in an environmentally friendly manner. To figure out how to use
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 technology in the safest way possible.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
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  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
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  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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