Companies should provide sport and social facilities for local communities. To what extend do you agree?
In each society, all folk ,
association
and governments have special responsibility for other people and society I completely disagree with Fix the agreement mistake
associations
this
sentence that the party should provide welfare amenities for the public. In this
essay, I will discuss this
issue then
followed by a reasoned conclusion.
Private teams in each country help country's
economy. They can supply Correct article usage
the country's
a
good Correct article usage
apply
condition
for the education of ordinary people Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
also
they can hire people and pay regular salary for them. Therefore
they help to control unemployment, in addition
, they can provide more equipment for their employee
Change the noun form
employees
such
as health care, sports facilities even education amenities and this
equipment create
a sense of satisfaction in their staff so, they work with more energy Correct subject-verb agreement
creates
also
more partiality and in the end, this
atmosphere leads to a good result. Such
as more benefits as well as
increasing financial activities so, needs more employees. Such
a function help
authorities with reducing unemployment.
Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
While
if the club do extra activities such
as providing social facilities maybe they will be away from the main task. On the other hand
, because private group supply their costs and expenses with their benefits, they are sensitive about expenses. Also
, they do not like to spend in this
field. If they have to do these activities, maybe do
not do well.
In conclusion, as far as I know, it is better for Verb problem
they will
public
and companies Correct article usage
the public
as well as
government
Correct article usage
the government
which
non-profit Correct word choice
if
organisation
or Fix the agreement mistake
organisations
charity
Fix the agreement mistake
charities are
doing
Wrong verb form
do
this
task and companies make
more benefits Verb problem
provide
until
providing better conditions for their staff.Change preposition
by
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