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Some people believe that children’s leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people argue that
children
’s playtime should involve gaining some knowledge, which can help them in later life, or else they treat that
time
 as useless. I conclusively disagree with
this
 statement.
To begin
 with, I am of the opinion that
children
’s free
time
 should engage in entertainment activities. A child needs to develop in all aspects,
besides
 intellectual, physical and mental health
also
 play a vital role in the growing up process of them. One of the effective ways is to incorporate recreational games or sports into
children
's leisure activities.
For instance
, many schools have introduced sports and games for students
such
 as chess, crickets, football, etc allowing them freely play and make new friends.
As a result
, they found that it not only does wonders for
children
's entertainment
,
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 but
also
 helps them improve many skills
such
 as problem-solving, critical thinking and communication.
On the other hand
, the enormous amounts of school tasks lead to anxiety which is the cause of various diseases. In Korea or Japan, many
children
 commit suicide due to too much study pressure every day.
This
 is dangerous and alarming.
Therefore
, the off-springs should have a relaxing and leisure
time
 which is the best way to have recovered so that they can continue to study effectively. In conclusion, I strongly believe that an adequate amount of leisure
time
 should always be granted to the
children
. It will certainly nurture the kid physically as well as mentally and
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 to their development positively in all aspects of life.
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