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Some people believe online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read, whereas others believe only printed material should be used. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In our modern era, online reading material become more widely used. As well as
children
, some adults and
parents
 let their
children
 use soft copies material for their reading.
However
, some people argued that
children
 should only use printed material. In the following paragraphs, both of these views will be discussed in detail before the conclusion is reached. On the one hand, some people let their
children
 use soft
copy
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book
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books
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 for their main online reading materials as they are easier
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in
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inaccessible
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accessible
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.
Parents
 are able to download
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the book
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book
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books
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 for their
child
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children
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 through online channels without
a
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 need to travel to a
book
 store.
Moreover
, they are able to buy a
book
 right away and they are unlimited copies so they do not need to worry about the sold out of the
book
.
On the other hand
, some
parents
 argue that
children
 should only read books through
a hard copies
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 as they are rumours and researches on health effects on
children
such
 as bad eyesight from
blue
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 light of the tablet.
Additionally
, some books might have pop-ups or textures which might extend the
children
's imagination
further
 when they see or touch which is a limitation for online material. In conclusion, it can be seen that despite these two opinions on
children
 reading material, it is still a very personal question for
parents
. Both of these have benefits and drawbacks that have to be considered by their
parents
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online reading materials
  • printed materials
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • technology
  • convenience
  • interactivity
  • accessibility
  • visual appeal
  • physical books
  • parental guidance
  • digital skills
  • screen time
  • learning experience
  • personal preference
  • comprehension
  • critical thinking
  • creativity
  • word recognition
  • grammar
  • vocabulary development
  • reading habits
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