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do you agree or disagree with the following statement. In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today

#twenty #years #cars
People use
cars
 as a major mode of transportation in day to day life. As the demand for
cars
 increases rapidly it's hard to believe that in the
next
 20 years there will be lesser
cars
 than today. I totally disagree with the statement and will. Justify my idea in upcoming paragraphs
To begin
 with,
cars
 became an integral part of daily lives. Individuals believe the
car
 is
best
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 option to travel
different
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 places which is not as it provides better comfort than the public transports. Due to the rising population,
car
 companies are seizing
this
 opportunity and manufacturing more affordable
cars
 that a middle-class family could
also
 buy. According to the reports a normal 5 person family owns at least 2 four-wheelers and
this
number
 are increasing so it's hard to believe that
this
number
 will be going to
decreased
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 in the near future
Secondly
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cars
 became a status symbol in recent times. A person's wealth is measured by the
number
 of
cars
 he owns. Many people believe having more
cars
 will give them a higher status in society. Some of the individuals
also
believes
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 that the
car
 is more of an asset than a liability. For
eg
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 my parents used to believe that having more
cars
 provide them with better financial security. The government are doing their level best to minimize
this
number
 by putting a heavy tax on
cars
.
Additionally
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 they are coming up with new rules and norms to control the
number
.
For instance
 in
myCountry
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my country
 India Delhi government came up with the law that no
car
 older than 15 years can run on roads To conclude, I believe the government is doing their best to control the usage of
cars
 but their efforts are not showing promising results and it is hard to believe that
number
 of
cars
 will decrease in the coming time.
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