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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being sellf-employed?

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Globalisation affects society from many perspectives.
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, to determine which occupations we should choose nowadays.
People
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 these days tend to be self-employed rather than an employee in a
company
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 or
organisation
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.
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further
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 statement will be discussed in the paragraph below. The cultures of an
organisation
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 are the gist for a
company
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 to follow the
rules
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. Certainly,
people
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 who
work
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 there must obey the policies of the
company
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.
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, a handful of
people
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 feel tired of the
company
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's
rules
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. A lot of
rules
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 often force the employees to
work
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 under pressure, to
work
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 overtime etcetera. Yet, the employees are trying their best to fit in the culture of an
organisation
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although
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 some
people
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 are not. Some
people
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 who don'
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 satisfy with the cultures of organisations love to
work
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 by themselves. These kinds of trends
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 mostly called self-employed or entrepreneur. Becoming self-employed has advantages and disadvantages. One of the advantages is entrepreneurs can
work
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 by themselves. It
doesn
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t
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 limit the area of interest and creativeness.
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, it
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t
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 have to follow the
organisation
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's
rules
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. In fact, an entrepreneur is more open-minded rather than an individual who works in a
company
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.
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, being self-employed has many drawbacks. One of them is hard to build a business if she
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t
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 have sufficient money
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 fund.
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 an entrepreneur is more likely a baby step in the business world and it takes too long to
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.
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, a self-employed has a high risk of failure if she
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t
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 have a clear plan for her business. Another reason is, to become successful businesswoman or businessman, should have plenty of connections if their works want to be well-known. According to The Businesswomen Association,
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connections are the most difficult things that
people
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 should polish their skills to gain a connection. To conclude, either as an employee
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or
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 self-employed has its advantages and disadvantages. All we need to do, to prepare for
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 concern is, improve our skills and knowledge related to our goals in the future. Becoming self-employed might have huge freedom but the employee has a higher possibility to get
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a promotion
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 and earn a big amount of salary.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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