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The Internet has dramatically altered our lives over the past few decades. Although some of these changes have been negative, the overall effect of this technology has been positive. What are your opinions on this?

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The
Internet
 has dramatically altered our lives over the past few decades.
Although
 some of these changes have been negative, the overall effect of
this
 technology has been positive. What are your opinions on
this
? is no doubt that the
Internet
 has changed our lives in recent years.
However
, there remains disagreement as to whether the overall impact of
this
 technology is positive or negative. There is certainly a strong debate about it, but I personally believe that the advantages of the
Internet
 far outweigh its demerits. I will explain you in subsequent paragraphs. On the one hand, there is no denying that the
Internet
 has revolutionized the way we communicate.
However
, it is clear that some of us are at risk of social exclusion as we prefer to spend our free time with gadgets rather than trying to communicate with others. In fact, many papers have claimed its adverse effect, especially among young people.
The technology
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 is
also
 impacting students' academic performance, and information is readily available these days, killing the desire to seek knowledge.
As a result
, you may not be able to meet the academic qualifications currently required by most employers.
At
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 the end,
number
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 of unemployed people will increase soon.
On the other hand
, the
Internet
 has put the whole
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world
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word
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world
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 at your fingertips. In the past, conducting a study lasted
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 of months or possibly years because of
lack
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 of information and data. From now on, information is accessible with one click.
This
 change has accelerated the pace of development.
Moreover
, you can now chat with your friends on the other side of the world within
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 of seconds. In Conclusion, the negative effects of the
Internet
 cannot be underestimated, but I believe it has made the world a more livable place.
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