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In schools and universities, girls tend to choose arts while boys like science, what are the reasons for the trend, and do you think this tendency should be changed?

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In the contemporary world, it is a common belief that girls are studying
Art
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 related
subjects
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 while the opposite gender has contradicted viewpoints. They may thoroughly mingle with the hard
subjects
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 like
science
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.
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,
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 may have different reasons and
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 statement would be altered in the future. So, I would like to elaborate
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 statement with relevant examples. In the neo-liberalised economic backgrounds, Community may show their tendency towards the most demanding jobs. So, most younger likely to study demanding
subjects
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 in order to get an appropriate
salary
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 as well as proper jobs.
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, major proportions of females may thoroughly interact with the
Art
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subjects
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,
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 as drawing, dancing or crafting because it may perpetuate a sense of autonomy, sense of esteem to mingle with
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 fascinating
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 it may easy to represent their talents.
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, The opposite genders may show different elements. They may always follow heavy
subjects
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.
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 as
science
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, maths, technology which are the most preponderant elements behind the high
salary
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 vacancies.
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, major parts of the girls are likely to be a teacher which may easy to mingle with their job and house works, because they are the epitome of hard-working with their child. Somehow, Males have only one thing to do for earning money. But females have done different tasks within a short time with their families.
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, it may alter due to the affordable living conditions, demand
career
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 list. If the student who follows
science
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 they could be a doctor or nurse in the future which will easy to access high
salary
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, while others who following
art
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subjects
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 they could be a teacher, social worker.
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 has various ramifications in the future due to the different high living standards. Owning to the various personal concern crowd may thoroughly bound with the difficult subject in order to live like a wealthy person in the light of high rate outcomes.
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, In these days Doctors, Engineers, Businessmen may earn a vigorous
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 more than teachers and Social workers due to the most demanding
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 path. In conclusion,
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 females are studying
art
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subjects
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 while others are following
science
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subjects
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 it might alter in the light of high living standards facilities, high rate of outcomes, demanding
career
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 job list, lack of
career
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 pathways.
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