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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes(for example, working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
 think that by the compulsory ways, the
people
 should learn unpaid
community
 service as the part of school programmes. The given essay discusses those opinions with both sides and gives some experiments and examples. On the one hand, the types of the
people
 opinions are correct, because, if the
children
 learn good deals from school, it gives help to
children
's future life,
furthermore
, the teachers who are taught school pupils to the unpaid
community
 services, it will be useful for all generations. in the future, The
children
 will be adults and teenagers and at that moment, they will try to aid the poor
people
, to give money or other financial things for charity, schools, orphanages and other places. In my ,view those minds are
also
 right. On the
second
 hand, the given above opinions are not correct. In my look, to give the h education about the unpaid
community
 services is good, but to give education with compulsory about those is not good. because, if the person takes education with obligatory, that crowd never like
this
 knowledge and follow. They feel worse and bad behaviour when the teachers say to them about the unpaid works, to mind , Nobody should force the
children
 about nothing, because, everyone has a mind, outlook and everyone can decide for their life,
otherwise
, the teachers should teach the
children
 and pupils about the unpaid works with recommend.
Moreover
, after that task, the
people
 can learn the
community
 works with pride. In conclusion, I join, the
second
 paragraph's views, because, on the society, the knowledge should not teach to the young generations with the obligation ,
otherwise
, they taught with pride and recommend, and after those, all things will be well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • high school programmes
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • improving the neighbourhood
  • teaching sports
  • sense of responsibility
  • empathy
  • broader perspective
  • societal issues
  • college applications
  • job applications
  • positive impact
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