Countries should restrict foreign companies from opening offices and factories in order to protect local businesses. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is weened by many
people
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that nations should put some
restrictions
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on foreign
companies
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offices
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and production
units
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to ensure the protection of local
business
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firms
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which is certainly good for every nation. I vehemently espouse that
restrictions
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on foreign
companies
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to protect local
businesses
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by
governments
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is really very conducive in order to save the employment of many locals and
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protection from
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difference. As these points require prudent elaboration, let us delve deeper into them with pertinent examples in the impending paragraphs.
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with, a large number of
people
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are in favour of putting
restrictions
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on foreign
firms
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to save local
companies
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because there are numerous reasons behind
this
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and foremost, since foreign
companies
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come up with new methods of
productions
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, these can create an issue of unemployment for local
people
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. To elaborate, because foreign
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companies
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companies'
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offices
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and factories can depend more on
machinary
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machinery
than humans, local workers cannot be able to get jobs in these new
units
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.
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, not only do
people
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working in the local
firms
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face low wage
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,
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but
also
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other workers can certainly be unemployed in
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system of foreign
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so
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the welfare of
people
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,
governments
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should restrict foreign
firms
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. To cite an example,
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Katharine Viner, the editor-in-chief of The Guardian newspaper in her editorial ‘Negative effects of foreign
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on the nations’ in May
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2016 clearly unveiled that many
people
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from local
firms
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had lost their jobs when foreign
companies
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started their production with
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method in many nations due to absence of
restrictions
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on foreign
firms
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.
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, as long as foreign
firms
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without any restriction from
government
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can use
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to date technology, local
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cannot compete
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them
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with
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technological
difference
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differences
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. To explain, when foreign
companies
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show up with hi-tech technology, it is a major threat for local
businesses
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and ultimately without restriction from
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governments
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the governments
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side can increase more
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. As a consequence, after
restrictions
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on foreign
companies
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units
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be
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it
factory
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factories
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or
offices
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, local
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business
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businesses
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may not have any fear of technological changes and they feel safe and protected. To exemplify,
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painstaking research conducted by Oxford University, over a group of 1500 local
business
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personnel ranging from 20 to 45 years old in March 2017 manifestly revealed that 85 % of them accepted that
restrictions
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over foreign
companies
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factories in the nation
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a
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necessary protection as local
firms
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were not able to
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them with existing
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technology. To encapsulate, it can unequivocally be concluded that it is necessary to protect local
businesses
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by restricting foreign
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companies
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offices
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and factories from the
governments
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of numerous nations as it is beneficial for local
businesses
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. I strongly believe that a restrictive environment for foreign
companies
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from countries to protect local
business
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firms
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is nowhere harmful in the form of
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locals from unemployment as well as
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a safeguard
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safeguard
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for
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technological issues.
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