Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There is a debate between people in the society that, the most suitable option is welcome hard moments like un-enthusiasm of employment or insufficient money while the other individuals believe the better thing of try and overcome
such
occasions. These views will be elaborated and my perspective will give at the end.
To begin
with, the huge loss will
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when accepting
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situation to the person as well as for the whole economy. When anyone
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such
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, they
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influenced by mental agony.
As a result
, the output of the job and efficiency
also
will
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.
For instance
, as of my personal experience, my previous employer was
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losing
his entire profit of one of a construction
project
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when the unsatisfied staff did not engage their duties well. Due to that, arisen of
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of situation,
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will directly country’s economy as the top-rated employer would not
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to fund
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new developments.
On the contrary
, the individual
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to arise by improving knowledge and starting
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business. By learning new things people become more knowledgeable and resulting
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they are able to find new opportunities for high wages. To illustrate, in Sri Lanka, the degree holders
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earn more than diplomatics in their career.
Hence
, if the diplomatics will complete their
further
studies they deserve
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best salary.
Furthermore
, by exploring and starting new businesses even online opportunities people who are suffering less money
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to grab a high income. To conclude, by taking all the facts together, it is proven that the overcome of bad situations is better than accepting a bad situation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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