Some people say that public sports facilities improve people's health problems. Others argue that this development has insignificant effects on public health. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some

people

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believe that the

sports

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facilities

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provided improve their

health

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problems, while others argue with these ideas and think that these

facilities

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have no effects on their

health

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. In the following paragraphs, both of these views will be discussed in detail before the conclusion is reached. On one hand, many

people

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and I agree that public

sports

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facilities

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that had been provided is an

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and will surely improve their

health

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. The

facilities

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provided

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free so everyone is able to access

easily

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them easily

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. As these

facilities

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are free to access,

people

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are able to spend their free time in an effective way.

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, some

people

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argue that these public

sports

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facilities

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has

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no effect on their

health

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. As these

facilities

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are free to everyone, hygenic could be an issue for some

people

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. As well as these

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equipment

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has

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no coach or supervisor to look after. According to

this

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people

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might be using the equipment in an incorrect way which might cause bad effects on their

health

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in long term. In conclusion, both

opinion

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on the public

sports

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facilities

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and their

health

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problem

are

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very personal views depending on

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that the person is worry or give more weight

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. Both opinions have benefits and drawbacks that have to be considered from their own point of view.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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220 words

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Some people say that public sports facilities improve people's health problems. Others argue that this development has insignificant effects on public health. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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The increase in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the causes of this? What can be done to solve this problem?