In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food, clothing, or medicine. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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strongly with technology and high
advancement
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there are still arguments rising around the world about the prohibition of animal
usage
for
food
, clothing and
medicines
. I partially disagree about the prevention of
animals
for
food
and
medicines
, as there are many supportive reasons regarding them in
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essay. on the
first
hand,
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would like to say that
i
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disagree about the
necessity
of using
animals
in
fashion
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industry
. As we all are aware that
animals
usage
in
fashion
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industry
is mostly adopted and
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used since the old times, at that time period the production of clothes or
fashion
accessories are very limited. Due to
this
limitation and increase in demand
of
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unique clothes and accessories animal skins and other extractions were used thoroughly. But in
modern
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world with the high development of technology and production, availability of
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number of options has been met, fulfilment of
such
demand has been done in the
fashion
industry
.
For example
, artificial skin textures and artificial leather products were being made by many top
fashion
brands. With
such
requirements met in the
fashion
industry
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there is no
necessity
usage
of
animals
.
On the other hand
, coming to
food
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industry
people need to recognize that the high
necessity
of animal
usage
is required. As meat is high protein
food
which is one
among
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the main
necessity
of
human
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body, these proteins can't be met with
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veggies, if we consider
prohibition
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of
animals
for
food
.
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food
is considered
as
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high protein and
vitamin rich
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, which can be never replaced with artificial elements as they exist naturally in them.
For instance
, consider the prohibition of
aninmals
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animals
for staple
food
then
the requirement of
such
proteins and vitamins should be met by veggies and
that is
highly impossible in some countries due to the less agricultural land, not only
this
but
also
the requirement of the vegetables will be booming and
such
high requirements cant be met globally cause of the high rate of meat-eating population. Coming to
medicines
as we already know that animal extractions for
this
usage
were mostly banned throughout all countries. But for testing the vaccines or
medicines
on
animals
cant be avoided as the human life risk is more valuable than that of
animals
. Rather than
humans
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it is better in all ways to test on
animals
because one for many is a great option. In conclusion, animal
usage
in
food
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and medicine industries can neither be avoided nor be replaced. But coming to the
fashion
industry
i
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would like to acknowledge that there is no demanding
necessity
of
animals
usage
.
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