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Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems, people should be encouraged to live in the suburbs or in the countryside rather than in the cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 present-day world, it has to be said that in order to curb
traffic
 and transportation issues, the government have to control migration from village to city by providing more amenities in the countryside; if the population in cities explode, transportation problems
also
 increases.I agree with
this
 notion and
this
 essay will enunciate agreement in detail with appropriate examples. To commence with, it is indeed an irrefutable fact that people from the countryside have a tendency to migrate to the cityside owing to the lack of basic facilities
such
 as medical care, education and job opportunities.To cite an example, a study was conducted by scholars of Harvard university about migration from the village to the city and increasing
traffic
 problems as well as reasons.The result shows about 80% of people are going to the cityside only because of lack of job ,medical care and education; as an increase in the populace, the
traffic
also
 increases with over usage of private
vehicles
. In the light of
this
 relevance, the officialdom has been taken some steps towards
this
 issue to control
this
 migration from the countryside by providing more facilities in the village area. To continue,the details mentioned in the aforementioned paragraph,it is only the tip of the iceberg.To elucidate
further
, increasing
traffic
 problems may pave the way for global warming through excess carbon in our environment from fuel used
vehicles
.
For instance
, a survey was conducted by the environment department in India about the amount of carbon from
vehicles
 from 2000 to 2020.The result shows about a 50% increment in carbon expulsion than bygone days.In the light of
this
 survey, the government have taken measures to curtail
this
 issue through electric
vehicles
. In conclusion, it has proven that
,
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 through the help of electric
vehicles
 and good infrastructure can curb
this
 issue in a smarter way.
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