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People say that a country will benefit greatly if students study abroad. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the present world, many
students
 are looking for opportunities for them to be able to
study
 abroad which many adults think
this
 reason will considerably benefit the
country
. From my point of view, it is agreeable that
students
 that went to
study
 abroad will surely benefit the
country
. In the following paragraph, the reasons to support my opinion will be discussed more in detail.
Firstly
, most of the
students
 that went to
study
 abroad will be able to learn their
second
 or
third
language
 depending on the
country
 they have gone to.
For instance
, in my
country
, Thailand, many
students
 are planning to go to an English speaking
country
. According to
this
, they will surely improve their English skill and obtain an opportunity to learn with native English speakers.
Moreover
, if they are planning to go to a
country
such
 as China, they will be able to learn their
third
language
.
Chinese
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language
 is very important now since China are one of the most powerful
countries
 in term of business. These benefits will surely improve the opportunity to export or import for the
country
 as they are able to communicate with other
countries
.
In addition
,
students
 that are able to learn in other
countries
 will expand their mindset
further
 especially when they went to a
country
such
 as England or America as there are
people
 from many nationalities.
This
 will help the student to learn how to handle
people
 with different aspects.
Therefore
,
students
 that had
study
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 abroad will understand the nature of
people
 from different
countries
 and be able to communicate effectively when doing business. In conclusion, I agree with the point of view that
students
 who studied abroad will enhance the
country
further
 as it seems to be that
by
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knowing
language
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 and understanding
people
 from different nationalities will help the
country
 to move forward easier.
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