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Type 1 Academic Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given line graph illustrated the fast food consumption trend in the UK from 1970 to 1990. The concerned categories consisted of hamburgers, fish and chips and pizza. Overall, the interest rate of fish and chips gained rapid consumers over the years despite its poor start,
consequently
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, it is considered to be the favourite dish in the UK in 1990.
In contrast
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, pizza showed the opposite trend with a great start in the beginning before falling down to the least concerned group. Evidently, the participation rate of fish and chips began with only 300 participants before skyrocketed significantly to 500 people from 1970 to 1990. In a similar manner, hamburgers gained prosperous popularity over 20 years period with an approximately 200 increase in population size.
Nevertheless
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, there was a slight decrease in the popularity of pizza from 300 to 200 from 1970 to 1980.
Hence
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, the trend remained stable since
then
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 with less than 50 increases in the interest rate from 1980 to 1990.

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