It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What sort of punishments should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

Knowing the
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difference
between right and wrong are very
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important
not only for childhood but
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for whole life.I agree punishment is a way to let them learn
this
distinction but we need
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about sort of punishment.
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,parents and teachers shouldn't hurt children even using language.Most
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chinese
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parents and teachers
maybe
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said why are you so stupid look at your classmate or why your classmate didn't do
wrong
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thing...etc.
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children .
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