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Many people choose to have a holiday in their own country rather than going overseas. What are the advantages and disadvantages of holidaying in your own country?

Travelling has been viewed as a common habit of humans which could be done for exploring either their own
countries
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 or abroad. A great number of people prefer to spend their holidays in a foreign
country
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.
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, visiting different places of our own
countries
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 is
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 widely accepted, though it is noteworthy to bear in mind that it can bring us various positive and negative effects. The following essay will overlook some of these benefits and drawbacks. On
one
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 hand, a great number of benefits of staying in
home
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country
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 for holidays are being suggested by experts.
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 of the most obvious ones is for the
country
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 industry to improve.
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, spending money in a remote town can help there to improve.
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, it is better to spend it on
development
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the development
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 of the home
country
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 rather than overseas.
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,
inspite
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in spite
 of the belief of
one
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 culture for
one
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country
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, each
country
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 consists of various people with different cultures. Knowing all of these cultural differences helps its residents to get along with each other better.
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, many employees have been moving from small cities to large ones for better job opportunities and not being familiar with each others' cultures have been causing lots of misunderstandings.
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, despite
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 benefits, it has brought us many drawbacks.
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, it can deprive people to visit the places that they can not find in their own
countries
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. As an example, desserts are mostly located in Africa. So the experience of feeling hot sounds is not achievable unless by travelling there.
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, going abroad provide the chance
of
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 not only
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experience
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 new places but
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 enjoying new foods. To illustrate, a great number of restaurants have been built that are providing foreign
cuisions
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cuisines
, but the
tast
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taste
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last
 is not the actual
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 you can experience the other
countries
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. To sum up, There is undoubtedly some advantages
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 spending time in
own
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our own
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countries
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, but it has brought us some problems. Improving industry and knowing our compatriots are located against new place and new food experience deprivation. In my opinion, the negative side can not negate the positive effects.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • staycation
  • domestic tourism
  • cost-effective
  • carbon footprint
  • sustainable tourism
  • national identity
  • culinary delights
  • heritage sites
  • unexplored gems
  • international understanding
  • cultural enrichment
  • local artisans
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