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Some are of the opinion that people are naturally born as good leaders while others feel that leadership skills can be learned. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Leadership
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 has been a topic of discussion among the elite of society, Some believe that it is something innate and some individuals are born with some trites that help them to become leaders, while others disagree and think that
leadership
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 is something that we acquire through the live experience. In
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 essay I will be discussing both views and why I totally agree with the
second
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 opinion.
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 with, individuals who are of the opinion that
leadership
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 is innate base their argument on the fact that some people are born with a charismatic personality and have a powerful presence which is something that can not be learned.
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, being creative and having a vision are essential
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 to be a powerful
leader
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 which are
skills
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 that individuals are born with.
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, it is undeniable that certain
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 that we acquire and learn through life's hardship play a vital role in shaping our character. Strategic thinking is an important skill it is what distinguishes a good
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 from a bad
one
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. For ,instance MARTIN LUTHER KING JR was a
leader
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 for the civil rights movement
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 of the key
skills
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 that made him a successful
leader
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 is the fact that he had a vision that
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 day all people will have equal rights in regard to their race , gender and religion.
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, without ,followers there is no commander and in order to have ,followers
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 must have the ability to encourage and motivate people around them
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 requires assertiveness and having good communication
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 as being a good speaker and a good listener. And
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 but not least have the confidence to stand up for what you believe and work hard to achieve your ambition. All of those are
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 that are learned through life experiences. In conclusion,I strongly believe that
leadership
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skills
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 are something that we learn and acquire through various live hardships, failures and experiences.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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