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Some people think that creativity is innate, while others think it is something that can be acquired. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Creativity is an act of turning imaginative things into
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 that
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 that it's acquired.
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. Of course,
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creative
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 see the world on a new side and they can compare seemingly
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unrelated
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 it with the help of your own experience. I
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 destroy the
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widespread
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. Researchers
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 that creativity comes with hardworking and depends on your opportunities and so on.
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Talented
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complete
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acknowledge
 work after 16 years of training. So, if you want to be creative, you should work harder than
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people
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 the other hand, we can accept the fact that creativity is an innate thing. Some children in their childhood may with
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 ability
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 combine information. Some
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overcoming abilities for thinking and something new. Ultimately, everybody
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 what
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to do. If
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 you want to be more
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successful
, you should
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work
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a bit harder. If you don't, it's your
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choice
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