Some students choose to work or travel after leaving school and before going to university. Many people, however, say that working experience is more useful in adult life than travel. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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job and trip after finishing school. Depending on pupil background from my perspective, rich enlistment ride around the world and middle-class recruitment take internships for university fees and
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experiences.
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for any industry that gives lots of knowledge, experience and opportunities.
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, Mark found Fackbook in school-age for his working point of view and gain opportunity.
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enlistment is travelling lots of countries got the knowledge, observe culture and opportunity.
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, AYO founder Ritesh Agarwal successful execute the hotel problem in 2011. In my perspective trial experience and sailing, both are important for admission to get lots of knowledge, opportunity, network and corporate working experience. Sometimes excursion enlistment
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their startup than normal job students like 9 to 5.
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, depends on the pupil and how to execute a problem and maintain study.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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