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People should never eat meat because raising animals for human consumption is cruel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons r your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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I STRONGLY BELIEVE THAT EATING ANIMALS MEAT IS SEEMS INHUMAN AND THE PUBLIC SHOULD AVOID IT
THUS
 RELYING ON A VEGETARIAN
DIET
.
THIS
 FORTHCOMING PARAGRAPHS WILL DISCUSS WHY PEOPLE SHOULD CHOOSE A VEGAN
DIET
 AND AVOID NON-VEGETARIAN FOODS AND THE BENEFICIAL SIDE OF
THIS
 CONSUMPTION. TO COMMENCE WITH, MOST OF THE CROWD THESE DAYS ARE FOND OF CHICKEN, MUTTON AND ON OTHERS KINDS OF
STUFFS
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 WHICH CAN LEAD TO VARIOUS HEALTH PROBLEMS AS WELL AS CAN INSTIGATE MANY PRE-EXISTING HEALTH ISSUES. WHEREAS VEGAN OR VEGETARIAN HABITS ARE MORE HEALTHIER FOR EACH AND EVERY INDIVIDUAL.
FOR EXAMPLE
, IF SOMEONE HAVE HAS DIABETES CAN CONTINUOUSLY CONSUME RED MEAT CAN DAMAGE IRREVERSIBLY WHICH MIGHT LEAD TO UNEXPECTED CIRCUMSTANCES. APPARENTLY , IF THAT PERSON CHOOSE TO EAT A GREEN LEAFY VEG
DIET
 CAN IMPROVE GRADUALLY EVEN WITH THAT HEALTH ISSUE .
FURTHERMORE
,
THIS
 EATING HABIT HAS TO BE CHANGED AND ELDERS HAVE TO TEACH THEIR FELLOWS ABOUT ITS ADVANTAGES.
SUCH
 AS
FIRSTLY
 , IT IS EASILY DIGESTIBLE WHICH IS THE MOST IMPORTANT ASPECT.
SECONDLY
, VEGAN
DIET
 CAN HELP THE NEW GENERATION TO MAINTAIN THEIR TRENDS OF WEIGHT MAINTAINANCE.
THIRDLY
, IT IMPROVES THE BODY METABOLISM SYSTEM. FOURTHLY, DOCTORS ALWAYS ADVISE THEIR PATIENTS TO GO FOR MORE LEAFY FOODS WHICH IMPROVES HAEMOGLOBIN, SKIN TEXTURE, CELLULAR ACTIVITY.
FOR EXAMPLE
, IF SOMEONE HAS UNDERGONE SURGERY LIGHT VEG SOUPS ARE PREFERABLE AND RECOMMENDED BY A DIETICIAN. TO SUM UP, MOTHER NATURE HAS ALWAYS GIVEN US A WIDE RANGE OF SOURCES TO CHOOSE WHAT SHOULD WE HAVE IN DAY TO DAY LIFE.
THEN
 THERE IS NO NEED FOR FARMING FOR ANIMALS.
THEREFORE
, I BELIEVE IF WE EAT HEALTHY WE CAN LIVE HEALTHY .
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