Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss Both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays,companies apply different methods to increase their
sale’s
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rate ,without
doubt
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advertisement
plays an important role in reaching
this
achievement.
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Although
it is sometimes thought that publicities are pervasive ways to convince
people
to purchase commodities, other
people
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that it is very common and can easily be ignored.In my opinion ,
advertisments
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advertisements
gurantee
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guarantee
enhancing
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rate
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. On the one hand , many
people
think that
advertisement
is vital for
corporation
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to be successful .One of the most important issues that
first
of all be mentioned is that
advertisment
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advertisement
have
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developed significantly and companies use the contribution of professional experts to find
niche
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a niche
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in markets and
also
they do a lot of research, clever methods and innovation to allure
people
. Take
cosmetic
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market as an example ,companies usually use celebrities to introduce their products
consequently
women are more eager to buy these specific products .
In addition
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force
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the majority of
people
who do not have time to shop around
rely
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on
advertisement
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the advertisement
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.
On the other hand
, it
sometimes
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believed that because publicity
are
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common we usually do not pay attention to them.Since they are seen everywhere
such
as
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and billboards we get accustomed
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therfore
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therefore
we do not consider them as a special event.
Moreover
,
people
are more
concious
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conscious
compared to
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decades and they know most of
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the publicities
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are exaggerated .
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Youtube
is good
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to explain
this
issue , we have witnessed that
people
easily skip advertisements
which
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interrupt the videoS they are watching even before they have been shown . In conclusion, while
people
may vary in their opinion , I think that
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role of
advertisement
in
success
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the success
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of
corporation
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can not be ignored.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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