Some people say that allowing children to make their own choices on every day matters (such as food, clothes,and entertainment)is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them.

Some
individual
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think that it is important for
children
to make decisions related to some important matters.
However
,other
people
say that if allowing to
children
to make their own
choices
daily things it involves food, clothes, entertainments result of
this
,
children
became bossy and stubborn. I completely agree with
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statement and I have justified my view in
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To begin
with, I believe that,
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decision making
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process is
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role in
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life. Whatever
children
allowing to make their own
choices
such
as food,
chothes
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clothes
, entertainment, becoming friends, lifestyle and so on.It creates
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impact on
children
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mind
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.In
a
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childhood,
children
make
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their own
decision
reason of
this
in older age
children
become a selfish and they only think about himself.
Children
make their own
choices
it is possible they have
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older
people
and
also
their
parents
. Sometimes
children
choose a bad way to improve their
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skills .
Moreover
,
children
choose their own path by own
decision
making it is bad for her family and society too.
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, one boy studied in school . They have
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money
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his friend without his permission and their
parents
did not
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even he theft money in
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.
Hence
,
children
make their
decision
on
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their own
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choices
sometimes it is
negative
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impact on their future.
On the other hand
, some
people
say that
,
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decision
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sometime
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it
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is better for their self-development.
Children
creates
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good
decision
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for their career . result of
this
, They can
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more confidence and never go down in any situation in their life . Example of. In a country
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UK
.
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her
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children
to make
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decision
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freely . So ,
children
can improve their skills and abilities. They cannot face any kind of fear in life . In conclusion
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It is important to
allowing
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children
to make their own
choices
however
, it is better to make decisions on
parents
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guidence
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guidance
. I strongly agree with
first
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statement .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomy
  • Consequence-awareness
  • Self-centered
  • Informal decision-making education
  • Child development
  • Age-appropriate choices
  • Cognitive growth
  • Fostering independence
  • Parental guidance
  • Societal norms
  • Interpersonal consideration
  • Balance of freedom
  • Individualism versus collectivism
  • Experience-based learning
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