Some people feel that boarding schools are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.

Some people think that boarding schools are the best choice for
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,
whereas
others think that it is not good, because of some reasons.
However
, the issue is not entirely straightforward, and the argument can
also
be made against the idea.
This
essay will discuss the debate and a give concluding view.
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the one hand, supporters of boarding
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schools
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say that living independently gives some advantages. First and foremost,
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is that
students
can boost their confidence when they live in
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.
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children
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on their own, they become
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to make decisions, spend money smartly and cook well.
Secondly
, it is often said that living in boarding
school
,
students
can focus on their lessons and spend time in
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school
library with their friends. At least, dormitory
students
could learn cooking
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would not hunger.
For instance
, my classmates, who live in university dormitory said that below advantages, they learnt
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well and started to
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money
for
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their necessary things and make decisions
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their own. On the
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hand, opponents of boarding
school
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schools
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point
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spending quality time with their family and living
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and
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is
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important reason. As
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reasons sometimes
students
face financial problems and feel
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due to
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of parents.
Furthermore
,
students
with bad
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might harm other
students
like taking drugs,
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more time in
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game
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and
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classes.
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, my cousin who lives in
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, has
been
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started
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drugs and got addicted pc
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since he started to study in Ulaanbaatar
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focus
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their parents. In conclusion,
students
should stay with their
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rather than live in boarding
school
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. It appears that the drawbacks of sending
students
to boarding schools far
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the minor advantages that it provides.
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