Some experts say for road safety cyclists should pass a test before being allowed on public roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is inevitable that there are lots of accidents growing more and more
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these days.
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, it is suitable to overcome a test before permitting
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vehicular traffic on public roads. I totally agree with
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although
just a limited amount of
people
use
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a bicycle
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bicycle
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. On the one hand, I want to argue
this
phenomenon because of several reasons, those ranging from losing an extra fee for the riding
liscence
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to gradually
reduce
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number of
people
using cycle.
Firstly
, they not only have to spend money on practising fundamental rules to get over the exam but riders
also
prepare for practice test driving.
Although
the price is not considerable, they suppose it to be time-consuming and have complicated administrative formalities. For
these reason
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, a fraction of
people
will transfer or replace bicycles
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other means of transportation. Meanwhile, nowadays the stimulation of using friendly-environmental vehicles is indispensable but because of a test, the
goverment
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government
fails to impulse
this
policy.
Desspite
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the aforementioned
arguements
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arguments
, according to my aspect, I support regulations and safety measures partly because of diminishing unexpected accidental cases and partly because of raising
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responsibility of traffic participants. Rules are promulgated to protect cycle users from legal liability when accidents happen.
For example
, one who crashes into
another vehicles
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,
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will be judged to get
purnishment
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punishment
from traffic police. From
this
way, it raises driving awareness of
people
during using transport. What’s more, riders should be responsible for their faults resulting from not obeying the law.
Cyclists
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appropriate lanes of other vehicles,
for instance
, easily causes collisions and adequately receive
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penalty
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. In conclusion, it
seem
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to me that it would be better, on balance, for
goverments
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governments
government
to set a threshold for
people
to ensure the safety
for
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people
using bicycle. It is understandable that some supports
this
phenomenon but from my perspective, I advocate
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this
premise with a view given the aforementioned reasons.
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