Some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination,while other think that tere are more important factors such as money and appearance.Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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life
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determination
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To begin
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looks
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life
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life
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Moreover
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appearance
and money, Use synonyms
beautie
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standards
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not necessarily correlate with success many people are born into rich families. There are other key factors that make someone successful. Correct subject-verb agreement
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Firstly
, being passionate about something will give us the power to stand up after each failure. Linking Words
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determination
enables us to overcome difficulties and obstacles. Use synonyms
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, MARIE CURIE was able to finish her late husband's work through Linking Words
determination
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Furthermore
having self-discipline helps us to focus on our goals and it provides us with rules to live effectively.And Linking Words
last
but not least having the willingness to acquire knowledge is Linking Words
also
important to succeed in Linking Words
life
.
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Although
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appearance
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determination
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Task Response
In the introduction, ensure to clearly present both views and your own opinion. Maintain a balance in discussing both perspectives.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure a clear and logical progression of ideas throughout the essay. Use linking words and cohesive devices to connect your ideas more effectively.
Lexical Resource
Expand your range of vocabulary to express ideas more precisely. Avoid repetition and aim for more variety in lexical choices.
Grammatical Range
Work on the accuracy and complexity of your sentences. Vary sentence structures and be mindful of grammatical errors.