Some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination,while other think that tere are more important factors such as money and appearance.Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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recent years Correct your spelling
In
its
been a topic of debate among people on what makes someone successful in Change the pronoun
it
life
. Some are of the opinion that success only comes from hard work and determination
, while
others believe that it depends on other factors such
as money and appearance
.In this
essay I will be discussing both views and why I totally agree with the first notion.
To begin
with, Nowadays we live in a materialistic world where most individuals judge others based on their look
and bank account. Having good fortune means being able to buy the best clothes having the ability to purchase the most beautiful houses and having access to the best services and education. Fix the agreement mistake
looks
Therefore
most people will assume that because that person is successful in his or her life
they are able to enjoy life
to the fullest. Moreover
, we can not deny that a person's appearance
is a key factor to
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in
succeed
in some sectors. For ,instance the modelling industry having a good look and Replace the word
success
fit
body is essential to be successful.
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a fit
However
, we can not base success only on appearance
and money, beautie
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beauty
standers
vary from one person to another, Correct your spelling
standards
also
being welthe do
not necessarily correlate with success many people are born into rich families. There are other key factors that make someone successful. Correct subject-verb agreement
does
Firstly
, being passionate about something will give us the power to stand up after each failure. Moreover
, determination
enables us to overcome difficulties and obstacles. For example
, MARIE CURIE was able to finish her late husband's work through determination
and because of that
she became a pioneer in the Add a comma
that,
physic
failed.Fix the agreement mistake
physics
Furthermore
having self-discipline helps us to focus on our goals and it provides us with rules to live effectively.And last
but not least having the willingness to acquire knowledge is also
important to succeed in life
.
In conclusion, Although
money and appearance
will give a head start in some sectors. passion, determination
, discipline, and working hard to achieve certain goals are the key elements to succeed
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life
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Task Response
In the introduction, ensure to clearly present both views and your own opinion. Maintain a balance in discussing both perspectives.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure a clear and logical progression of ideas throughout the essay. Use linking words and cohesive devices to connect your ideas more effectively.
Lexical Resource
Expand your range of vocabulary to express ideas more precisely. Avoid repetition and aim for more variety in lexical choices.
Grammatical Range
Work on the accuracy and complexity of your sentences. Vary sentence structures and be mindful of grammatical errors.