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the alteration of the library between 2000 and present.

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The given maps illustrate the alteration of the library between 2000 and the present. Overall, there were noticeable changes after the construction take place and the significant change can be seen in the addition of the extra facilities. In 2000.the fiction occupied the whole on the back, but in the present art,hobbies and cookery are
also
 added. The fiction
section
 to the west is replaced by the non-fiction
section
 on the right of which the original
section
 of art, hobbies and cookery in 2000 are removed and in place of these the three tables are placed.
Similarly
, a non-fiction shield towards the south is converted into a cafe. No changes are made to the entrance, travel
section
 , service desk and new books
section
. Towards the west, the travel and new book shields are right after the entrance and the service desk is in the front right corner in both the years.
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