government will not provide the most innovative methods of treatment and it’s better to invest those funds in education and culture. What is your opinion?

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There is currently a contentious argument among people over whether the government should afford health facilities for the public free or
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invest in educational and cultural investigations. Personally, I agree that those government funds should be allocated to fulfil more and more modern methods of cure. The main reason why I support free medical service is,
everyone
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that everyone
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in the society is not capable of taking good care of themselves because of their
economical
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background.
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, several times people ignore their illnesses,
eventually
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and eventually
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this
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negligence may invite serious concerns. If authorities make
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service free
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everyone in society will be aware of their health conditions and
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can contribute to
build
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a strong and robust nation.
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,
ministry
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the ministry
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collects budgets from
taxations
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taxation
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, which
are
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paid by citizens.
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, it is their duty to provide basic necessities at no charge.
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,
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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