Some people believe that children should spend all of their free time with their family. Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Children

have much free

time

to do in their youth. It comes up with their eagerness to know every little thing that suits them, especially when it comes to a social connection,

such

as playing with their friends.

For instance

, parents should pay more attention to

children

's activities so they can process what is good and what is bad for them. Some people believe that

children

should have more

time

with their families to minimize negative impacts that would hurt

for

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them. It believes their family can teach them good stuff, so in the following

time

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they will become someone with good manners and can make positive impacts on society.

For example

, the heir at age 5 to 11 still do not know how to do some things correctly, so in

this

case, their family can help them to learn better by spending their free

time

.

Although

this

seems good, as a human, they still have to spend with others. As a part of human beings, an heir

also

need

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to socialize with friends of their age. Socializing can be helpful for them in the future when they have to work together with others.

For example

,

children

that usually play with their buddies can build their communication ways and create social bonds between them.

Thus

, they will have better sympathy in the future that help society to be better. Aside from

this

, they

also

can release their stress and it will lead to being happier. In conclusion,

although

they are a pure little thing that still has

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so many things from their family, they

also

have to know what freedom is.

For example

by playing with their friends at the same age.

This

will not only help how they grow up but

also

create their sympathy towards each other.

Besides

that, they will learn how to work together and make good communication ways.