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Without capital punishments (the health penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increases. Capital punishment in essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The argument about capital punishment is a very controversial one. Some individuals believe that
death
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 sentence is mandatory in order to reduce the rate of crimes, while others argue against
this
. I am of the opinion that capital penance should only be used when there are no other alternatives. Supporters of the death sentence would dispute that
this
 discipline is justifiable for some heinous crimes.
For example
, serial killers and
rapist
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 have been seen to be irredeemable despite serving several
years
 in prison.
As a result
 of
this
 repeated participation of
unlawful
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 it is only right they be sentenced to the electronic chair.
Furthermore
,
this
 would deter other culprits from engaging in misdeeds.
However
, opponents of the end of life sentence like me, believe
this
 should not always be used unless there are no other options.
Firstly
, a lot of persons have been wrongfully convicted. Take
for
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 instance, in the United States of America there are hundreds of people who have been arrested for an
offense
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 they did not commit, and it takes
years
 of investigation before they are exonerated. Now, imagine if some of them were sentenced to death,
then
years
 to come sufficient evidence is brought forward and they are found not to be guilty. Justice was never served and of
course
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 they can not be raised from the dead.
Therefore
, it is only right to use other options of discipline
such
 as
few
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years
 in jail or community service.
In addition
, mentally sick individuals that commit an
offense
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 should be sent for psychiatric evaluation and be proven to lack
mens
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 rea. Once
this
 is done and they are found to have a mental illness, an alternative punishment for them is to be taken to a
behavioral
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 facility. In conclusion, I would argue that capital punishment is not always a necessity to reduce the rate of criminal activities, there are various methods that can be used to tackle violence in
the
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society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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