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International tourism is now more common than ever before. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while others do not. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

Seeking adventures by travelling overseas is now becoming a popular trend, unlike before. While some have advocated for
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 as a worthwhile development, others have criticized it as being bad.
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 should be seen in the positive limelight, as it helps people to socialize and creates exciting memories for
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 to cherish for a lifetime.
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 hand, going outside the shores of
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's
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 for
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 does not offer any economic benefit for
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's own nation, rather it only helps to build the economy of the nation with the tourist attraction.
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 is due to the fact that; the economic resources of
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's
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 are taken out to develop that of another
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, making the adventurer's nation to be at a disadvantage economically.
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, many Nigerians in the elite class, often travel to Dubai for
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 and pleasure, spending a large amount of money, (Nigerian Naira earn from working within the system) on footing
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 international trips. The effect of
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 cash flow will only benefit Dubai; the
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 with the tourist attraction centre.
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, going out for international
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 afford
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 the opportunity to socialize and get exposed to what operates in other climes.
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, by going for adventure outside
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 local
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,
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 can meet with new people; and makes new friends through interaction with others.
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 trips create lasting memories for
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 to share and cherish for a lifetime.
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, a number of people who had once partook in an international trip, often have exciting and unforgettable stories to tell, years after
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 may not seem to offer any financial benefit to an adventurer's
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; in my opinion, the values and experience the individual stands to gain in terms of socializing and getting good exposure, along with the pleasant memories it creates in
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's mind are worthwhile.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable tourism
  • cultural exchange
  • economic impact
  • hospitality sector
  • infrastructure development
  • environmental degradation
  • local economy
  • global understanding
  • seasonal fluctuations
  • tourist influx
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