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19. Some people think that success is the best measure of intelligence, while others think that intelligence can be measured in other ways. What is your opinion?

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Some men and women believe that our
intelligence
is equals
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 our
success
.
However
, in my view, we can be estimated in other ways. There are various forms. In fact, in many
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cases
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case
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 our
success
 depends on our
intelligence's
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intelligence
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 ability.
For instance
, Elbert
Eishtein
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Einstein
 was
an
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 smart and wise
person
.
Therefore
, his
success
 was widespread.
Moreover
, he was rich and successful in
others
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 fields. If we think widely, we will talk and write senseless. Smart
people
 can be famous easily and they find quickly their way than others in our modern world.
Nonetheless
, all
people
 are not intelligent but there are successful
people
 in their insides. Hard work and persistence can make famous each
person
.
Therefore
, we have always
have
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 chances to achieve
to
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success
.
Moreover
, we need to grow our skills that
helps
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 us to obtain our goal.
Furthermore
,
the
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intelligence
 can be
measure
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measured
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 in our income. Earning money sometimes depends on our ability of
brain
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the brain
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.
Smart
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A smart
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person
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people
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 earn more and make money
easily
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more easily
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 than others. They always believe
their
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in their
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 power of
brain
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the brain
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. A lot of
people
 need to be smart and wise. Smart
people
 are creative and they create many inventions and noticeable changes in our lives. In conclusion,
the
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apply
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intelligence
 cannot be
only
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the only
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 measure for
success
. They depend on a lot of factors and
cases
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causes
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.
However
, we try to be smart. Being
intellectual
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an intellectual
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person
 can give
a
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us a
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lot of opportunities to achieve our aims.
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