A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
At the present time,
people
judged other’s
values by their wealth or their social Fix the agreement mistake
others’
status
and not by their honour, kindness, and trust like the
old days. Change preposition
in the
This
essay agrees with the statement that people
nowadays and people
in the old times have a different perspective in seeing a person’s worth. Firstly
, the essay will discuss about
how Remove the preposition
apply
people
nowadays value
other
and Correct pronoun usage
others
secondly
, it will discuss how people
in the old times judge a person’s worth.
The internet plays a big role in our daily life
, we can see each other people
’s life
through our Replace the word
lives
phone
. Fix the agreement mistake
phones
People
nowadays always check everything online, they search for other people
social Change noun form
people's
status
through social media. A person who has an interesting daily life
tend to make friend easier than a person who does not have social media. That is
why everyone is building their image online and like to spend time with people
who have higher social status
. For example
, if a person wants to build a career in entertainment, he or she need
to have Change the verb form
needs
a
high Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
followers
Correct quantifier usage
number of followers
in
social media to gain influenceChange preposition
on
,
and to have Remove the comma
apply
a
high Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
followers
they need to Correct quantifier usage
number of followers
be friend
with Correct your spelling
befriend
other influencer
.
In the old days, Change the wording
another influencer
other influencers
people
rarely see each other except for neighbour
or individuals that Fix the agreement mistake
neighbours
work
together. They Wrong verb form
worked
also
cannot see other’s
daily life
unless they live together. That is
why people
see each other value
by their honour, kindness, and trust. It is hard to see other’s
material Fix the agreement mistake
others’
possesion
because Correct your spelling
possession
possessions
people
don’t share their private life
. Therefore
people
only can judge other’s
value
by their interaction with others.
In conclusion, Fix the agreement mistake
values
people
nowadays see other’s
value
by their social status
and wealth because with the current technology we can see other’s
private life
while in the old days we cannot.Submitted by nadita.ayudya on
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