A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

At the present time,
people
judged
other’s
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others’
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values by their wealth or their social
status
and not by their honour, kindness, and trust like
the
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old days.
This
essay agrees with the statement that
people
nowadays and
people
in the old times have a different perspective in seeing a person’s worth.
Firstly
, the essay will discuss
about
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how
people
nowadays
value
other
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others
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and
secondly
, it will discuss how
people
in the old times judge a person’s worth. The internet plays a big role in our daily
life
, we can see each other
people
’s
life
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through our
phone
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.
People
nowadays always check everything online, they search for other
people
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social
status
through social media. A person who has an interesting daily
life
tend to make friend easier than a person who does not have social media.
That is
why everyone is building their image online and like to spend time with
people
who have higher social
status
.
For example
, if a person wants to build a career in entertainment, he or she
need
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to have
a
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high
followers
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in
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social media to gain influence
,
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and to have
a
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high
followers
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number of followers
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they need to
be friend
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befriend
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with
other influencer
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another influencer
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. In the old days,
people
rarely see each other except for
neighbour
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neighbours
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or individuals that
work
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together. They
also
cannot see
other’s
daily
life
unless they live together.
That is
why
people
see each other
value
by their honour, kindness, and trust. It is hard to see
other’s
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others’
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material
possesion
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possession
possessions
because
people
don’t share their private
life
.
Therefore
people
only can judge
other’s
value
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values
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by their interaction with others. In conclusion,
people
nowadays see
other’s
value
by their social
status
and wealth because with the current technology we can see
other’s
private
life
while in the old days we cannot.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social status
  • material possessions
  • old-fashioned values
  • honour
  • kindness
  • trust
  • empathy
  • media influence
  • self-worth
  • metrics of success
  • financial achievements
  • community contributions
  • superficial connections
  • emotional bonds
  • life satisfaction
  • stress and anxiety
  • policy changes
  • community programs
  • restoring balance
  • personal character
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