A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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essay agrees with the statement that Linking Words
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in the old times have a different perspective in seeing a person’s worth. Use synonyms
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, the essay will discuss Linking Words
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nowadays Use synonyms
value
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and Correct pronoun usage
others
secondly
, it will discuss how Linking Words
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in the old times judge a person’s worth.
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through our Replace the word
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phone
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nowadays always check everything online, they search for other Use synonyms
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people
social Change noun form
people's
status
through social media. A person who has an interesting daily Use synonyms
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tend to make friend easier than a person who does not have social media. Use synonyms
That is
why everyone is building their image online and like to spend time with Linking Words
people
who have higher social Use synonyms
status
. Use synonyms
For example
, if a person wants to build a career in entertainment, he or she Linking Words
need
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high Correct the article-noun agreement
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number of followers
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number of followers
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befriend
other influencer
.
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people
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also
cannot see Linking Words
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unless they live together. Use synonyms
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why Linking Words
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see each other Use synonyms
value
by their honour, kindness, and trust. It is hard to see Use synonyms
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other’s
material Fix the agreement mistake
others’
possesion
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possession
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people
don’t share their private Use synonyms
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Therefore
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people
only can judge Use synonyms
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value
by their interaction with others.
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