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In spite of the advances made in agriculture , many people around the world still go hungry why is this the case ? what can be done about this problem?

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Agriculture plays a vital role in the economy as well as it is considered the backbone of the economic system for developing countries.Despite advances introduced in farming, numerous
people
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 around the globe are still hungry.In the below paragraphs, I will illustrate the causes and solutions for
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 problem.
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 with, As we all know that so many
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 are hungry due to their poverty.As rich is becoming richer poor is in the same place.Country's economies play a major role in the
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 industry.
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, due to unemployment
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 are not having more money to buy a portion of
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.
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,we can see in India there are more
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 in slum areas who are starving for
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 irrespective of their ages.The schemes which are provided by the government is not reaching poor
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.In some countries ,they cannot do farming as they don't have agricultural lands.So, they need to buy
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 from other countries.
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, In Indonesia
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 may not have one meal.
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, Now most of the
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 are not interested in doing farming and they want to migrate to cities for the amenities.
People
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 should cook enough
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 for their uses because a lot of
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 is a dustbin.
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, In ,celebrations
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 are cooking more
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 and after ,celebration they are throwing the
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 in the dustbin.
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 of throwing it in the
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 dustbin they can distribute it to the poor
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.
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, Many NGOs has started
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 process they are collecting
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 and giving it to the poor so that no one can stay hungry. To summarize, as humans we should realise the value of
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.Every calamity is based on humans only we shouldn't damage our nature.Government should spend some awareness camps about the

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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