Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree

The debate on
gender
-based
college
admissions has been a trending topic lately, along with the inclusion of
Gender
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Equality
Bill as
this
year's legislative priority list. In the aforementioned bill, it is proposed that colleges must admit the same proportion of men and
women
. Generally, I am of
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that
such
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is admissible as it would accelerate the
gender
equality
efforts, but some reservations would need to be made to prevent possible imbalances in the future.
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admission
policy
is one of the best tools universities have to promote
gender
equality
and ensure that those who are
otherwise
shut out of the nation’s postsecondary system have a chance to earn a quality degree. For much of our nation’s history, elite universities were largely reserved for wealthy, predominantly male. The current male and female students’ ratio is 65:45, and the gap is even bigger in some certain majors, particularly the STEM department. Affirmative action
such
as the proposed sex-based
college
entrance selection is not something new. Soon after the Reformation Era in
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90s, parliament has introduced a similar
policy
for the election, which requires
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a political
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party
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parties
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to enlist at least 30%
women
legislative
candidate
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candidates
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. Since
then
,
women
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women's
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participation at the parliament has risen significantly, where 23% of the congress members are now
women
, tripled the 1997 number where the parliament only had 7%
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women
.
However
,
such
policy
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proposal
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should be decided prudently. It could lead to a new unwanted injustice as it may
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certain
other group
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another group
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of their best
college
opportunity. It may
then
lead to students, particularly
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, demotivation as they may lose hope in their chance to get their best possible education. Details
such
as whether the above proposal applies to all majors in all colleges, what is the ideal
gender
ratio, and how long the referred affirmative action proposal will be applied must be carefully determined. In conclusion, I believe that the
gender
-based
college
admission
policy
is a good bid towards achieving the
gender
equality
goal.
However
, the
policy makers
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should decide
this
topic very carefully, as several limitations will need to be made to avert any possible unintended consequences in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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