You work for an international company. You want to attend special family celebration during working hours. You need to take time off work for this. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter - Give details of family celebration - Tell your manager how much time time off work you need - Suggest how work can be done while you attend the celebration

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Suju, I am writing

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letter to ask you to please help me because I

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attend my family celebration in Brampton. My sister

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leave on

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to do at the home. My schedule for

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Tara and she is going to do my shift job. She

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to join after her holiday on the 22nd but for

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. Yours sincerely, Tinku Sharma

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

167 words

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