You work for an international company. You want to attend special family celebration during working hours. You need to take time off work for this. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter - Give details of family celebration - Tell your manager how much time time off work you need - Suggest how work can be done while you attend the celebration

#work #company #celebration #hours #time #manager

Dear

Mr.

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Suju, I am writing

the

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letter to ask you to please help me because I

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want

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attend my family celebration in Brampton. My sister

is get

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engage

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Wednesday

(August 21st) and

family

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want me there at my

father

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home for the

function

. Her wedding is

month in India and I

am not go

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to the wedding so I want to be with

sister

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for her engagement

function

. I

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want

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leave on

Wednesday

as we have many

thing

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to do at the home. My schedule for

Wednesday

is in the evening shift and I already spoke to

Ms.

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Tara and she is going to do my shift job. She

suppose

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to join after her holiday on the 22nd but for

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she

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favour

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and join on

21st

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and replace me for my shift. So, please give me

holiday

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sister

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Wednesday

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off you can

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come

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. Yours sincerely, Tinku Sharma

Submitted by Toni R on Sat Mar 12 2022

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2Word repetition
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25Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

167 words

6.50

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter -describe the problem.

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