It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

Both of my parents who work as teachers always show that
education
is a window to the world. Parents always prioritize
education
to be the capital to become a better person with a brighter future. With economic limitations to send 5 children to school, but because I hoped to get the best
education
I was sent to the best school in Medan by getting a discount on school fees because the children were teachers. Having the opportunity to study in the best junior and senior high schools made me able to receive the best
education
and teachers and made me motivated to study to the fullest.
This
made me get the best rank in my class and was sure to compete in the selection to enter the STAN in the hope of providing the best potential for me for myself, my family, and
also
the Indonesian nation. While studying at STAN, I already knew the role I would carry out after graduation, namely being an employee of the Ministry of Finance. And entering BPPK as my office agency after graduating, made me realize that what I was dealing with were human resources at the Ministry of Finance because we held training for employees of the ministry of finance. When
first
introduced to Customs and Excise Training Center employees, one of the senior lecturers said "Never stop learning, If you don't learn, you will die." These words can describe my curiosity since childhood and have become my guide to
this
day. If we can't keep up with today's developments with all its very dynamic changes, if we can't follow immediately and adapt by seeking new information, learning new knowledge, and applying it
then
we will "die" which means sinking into the flow of change. While we must be able to stand up and swim along with these changes.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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