Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Living in
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society has
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triggered
some people to contribute to their
community
.
This
idea has been argued to be adapted as a mandatory programme in a high school. The following essay will elaborate more on its benefit as I strongly agree with
this
matter.
To begin
with, the University of Melbourne’s research reveals that giving back to
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is highly boost someone’s self belonging.
For instance
, scaling up the younger children’s
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ability has given us a piece of responsibility to perform best. In the long run, we will exceptionally think we are being part of them.
Moreover
,
this
sense of belonging shall always remind us to think twice about our decision’s impact
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society.
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, we are not going to throw our garbage unresponsibly due to our love
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community
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.
Furthermore
, the assigned programme helps student discover their interest and their potential. In
such
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, they exercise in identifying things they are passionate
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.
Otherwise
, they
also
obtain the opportunity to analyze things they don’t really good at. As an
ilustration
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illustration
, a student
enroled
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enrolled
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a charity programme may dig their interest in generating a creative idea for fundraising.
Otherwise
, they
also
may notice that they still have a lack ability in managing people. Overall, I suppose the proposal of servicing the
community
is worth
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. In the
next
future, it affects positively
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their love
to
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community
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and perceiving their passion.
However
, a
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school
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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