Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Living in society has triggered some people to contribute to their

community

. A certain idea has been argued to adapt

the

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volunteering as a mandatory programme in a high school. The following essay will elaborate more on its benefit as I strongly agree with

this

matter.

To begin

with, the University of Melbourne’s research reveals that giving back to the

community

is highly boost someone’s self belonging.

For instance

, scaling up the younger children’s sports ability has given us a piece of responsibility to perform best. In the long run, we will exceptionally think we are being part of them.

Moreover

, a sense of belonging shall always remind us to think twice about our decision’s impact on society.

For example

, we are not going to throw our garbage unresponsibly due to our love for the

community

Furthermore

, the assigned programme helps student discover their interest and their potential. In

such

instances, they exercise in identifying things they are passionate about.

Otherwise

, they

also

obtain the opportunity to analyze things they don’t really good at. As an illustration, a student enrolled in a charity programme may dig their interest in generating a creative idea for fundraising.

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the other hand, they

also

may notice that they still have a lack ability in managing people. Overall, I suppose the proposal of students' volunteering is worth implementing. In the

future, it affects positively

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their love for the

community

and perceiving their passion.

However

, a school still have to discuss terms and conditions that may be applied.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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11Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

255 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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