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: MANY PEOPLE ARE TRAVELLING TO OTHER COUTRIES. WHY? IS IT POSITIVE OR NEGATIVE DEVELOPMENT

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Nowadays, more and more folks are moving to other nations. In my opinion,
this
 trend is caused by many reasons and I
thinks
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 it is a positive improvement. My ideas will be discussed herein.
To begin
 with, there are two contributing factors motivating people to travel.
Firstly
, folks are curious about other cultures. In detail, when they are on a trip, they have a chance to expose to a new culture and the locals.
Hence
, they can make
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 of different traditions in different nations, which help them enrich their knowledge about the world or their profession.
For instance
, many
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such
 as Gordon Ramsay have travelled to Vietnam to broaden their knowledge about ingredients and seasonings, which are processed perfectly in Vietnamese dishes.
Secondly
, many people decide to go on a trip to other nations in order to visit or reunion with their family or relatives who live overseas.
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, learners studying abroad are likely to return to their countries to enjoy a holiday or a vacation with families or friends. I believe travelling overseas brings a positive effect on society. The more visitors come to a country, the more jobs are created. In detail, the local people’s income will increase through providing shelters and selling their traditional cuisines.
For instance
, Vietnam welcomes millions of foreign visitors from around the world annually creating many jobs for the locals, saving them from poverty and unemployment and proving a better quality. To conclude, folks tend to travel to acquire new knowledge or meet their families. I root for the idea that
this
 trend is a positive improvement
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