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Today,many people do not know their neighbors in large cities What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

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Nowadays.many
people
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 lose connection with their
neighbors
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neighbours
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.
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,citizens would experience a sense of loneliness and they could not get
helped
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 in emergent cases.
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,it can be solved by organizing local
events
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 to make a good relationship. One of the results of the problem is they will be very lonely.
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 is
due to
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 the shortage of time
people
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 spend on communicating with others and meeting their neighbours because of their busy lives so they have no energy to communicate with their neighbours on weekdays, and at the weekends they want to rest and regain their energy to start the week energetically.
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,
people
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 will find their lifestyles boring. Another considerable result of losing connections is city dwellers could not ask for help in urgent cases.There are some situations that
people
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 can not solve by themselves .To illustrate,citizens need to keep their pets on the holidays.
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, there are some solutions to make free hours to socialize with each other.
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, most countries have some traditional
events
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 nations celebrate.
People
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 could plan a ceremony to celebrate these special
events
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 together.
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, they could gather in one’s home or if the building has a garden they could meet each other there.
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, families who have children could let them play with each other and strike a friendship. In
this
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 way, the child’s parents meet and get to know others’ parents as well. In conclusion,
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 not realise
neighbour's
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a neighbour's
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faces
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 is a significant problem,it can
be caused
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cause
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the
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loneliness and not being helped in emergent situations.But it can be solved by local
events
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sense of community
  • isolation
  • loneliness
  • support network
  • sense of security
  • trust
  • cooperation
  • social support
  • integration
  • community events
  • shared spaces
  • neighborly interactions
  • neighborhood watch programs
  • community engagement
  • technology
  • connect
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