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the alteration of the road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

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The given maps illustrate the alteration of the pathway access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Overall, there are noticeable changes after the constructions take place and the significant changes can be seen in the addition of extra facilities. In 2007, the hospital was located towards the north, which was surrounded by a ring road on the south of which connected with the hospital avenue running from the north to the south. Another main avenue was there towards the south of
this
 roadway running from the west to the east. On each side of the hospital road, toward the west and the east were six bus stops and there was a car park for staff and the public on the east. An enormous change can be seen in 2010, the two roundabouts were added, one between the hospital avenue and the ring road, whereas another one between the hospital roadway and the city roadway. These two roundabouts connected with a large bus stop towards the west, the six bus stop in 2007 was removed. The original parking area retained its place but provide for staff only, while the addition of the new car park was constructed towards the east of the hospital, which was provided for the public only
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