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People should look after their health because this is a duty to the society not just a personal benefits. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some believe that
people
 should take care of their
health
 not because of personal benefits just because it is a duty to the community. As far as I am concerned, I totally agree with
this
 idea. In
this
 essay, I will point out some of
my
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 reasons for my agreement.
First
 of all, being healthy is the best gift from nature.
Health
 is very important to have a clean,fresh and happy
society
.
In addition
, humans are the only ones that can make a better community. Since
people
 are living on the earth, breathing the air
that is
 provided by the earth and eating foods that are supplied, they have the duty to take care of the
society
 they live
and
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 staying healthily is one of the best solutions of looking after their towns. It is undeniable fact that the healthier the
people
, the better the environment. What is more, illness can bring a lot of disadvantages to
society
.
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For instance
,
people
 who have a serious disease may release their virus and bacteria through coughing
to
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 other
people
 leading unhealthy environment.
Moreover
, there is no doubt that developed countries are healthier countries. They can make more investment into big business since they do not need to spend extra money on
health
 problems. On the one hand, obesity is one of the popular issues in most cities resulting not only in the increase of death but
also
 in body shaming which lead to a toxic
society
. In conclusion,
although
health
 brings joyful and personal benefits, it is not the only reason that
people
 should look after their
health
.
People
 should bear in their mind that staying healthily is
also
 their duty to the place they live.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • duty
  • well-being
  • burden
  • healthcare systems
  • productive
  • economy
  • example
  • empower
  • informed choices
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