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Some people say that most of the urgent problems can only be solved with international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It’s true that some people believe that cross-national support is the most effective way to tackle
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emergent issues in certain countries. From my perspective,
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 totally agree with
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 will discuss the reasons in the following essay. There are some national problems which
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 urgent to deal with,
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 as famine in some undeveloped country. People there are encountered with an extreme scarcity of food, and
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widespread malnutrition and death from starving. Most of the reasons
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 from inevitable natural weakness,
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, prolonged flooding, drought, extreme cold, insect infestation and plant disease which can’t be
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 with
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 itself.
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, in these cases, governments by no means should ask
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 aid from other developed nations which have major economics, conducive to gaining stable and enormous food
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 to distribute
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 dwellers and solve the hunger problems.
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 should rely on international cooperation when they face unexpected catastrophes like
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an earthquake
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earthquakes
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, tsunamis, and tornado
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. Those kinds of
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 are overwhelming challenges
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 insist on international assistance. What’s more, the Russian invasion of Ukraine
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 currently is
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 is too complicated to solve alone. The reconstruction plan for the country is needy
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 international support. In conclusion, in my view, it’s true that
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international assistance is an effective way
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 dealing with many
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acute problems
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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